freakysoccer
05-26-2008, 08:57 PM
this is a short story i just finished writing. just read and tell me what ya'll think..
Sitting all alone here in this cold, harsh world full of sadness and depression.I get a strange feeling; something of happiness,possible
joy. There seems to be some light in this pit of hell that is my life.
The broken, shattered pieces of my soul begin to join.Something is taking hold of me. Something i can't control.it feels as if i'm being molded, shaped into something new. WHAT IS THIS FORCE THAT'S EMBRACING ME? I ignore it, but it continues. continues pulling, changing, shaping.I give up! it's taken hold so strongly. I can't fight it so i surrender.Everything is dark. I slowly awake. There's light, warmth, comfort, joy.All these things i've longed to feel but never felt. There's a presence.It overpowers me. I fall to my knees in tears, overwhelmed by emotion.happiness. love. Then it all occurs to me. I know what's happened.I've been saved.
Sitting all alone here in this cold, harsh world full of sadness and depression.I get a strange feeling; something of happiness,possible
joy. There seems to be some light in this pit of hell that is my life.
The broken, shattered pieces of my soul begin to join.Something is taking hold of me. Something i can't control.it feels as if i'm being molded, shaped into something new. WHAT IS THIS FORCE THAT'S EMBRACING ME? I ignore it, but it continues. continues pulling, changing, shaping.I give up! it's taken hold so strongly. I can't fight it so i surrender.Everything is dark. I slowly awake. There's light, warmth, comfort, joy.All these things i've longed to feel but never felt. There's a presence.It overpowers me. I fall to my knees in tears, overwhelmed by emotion.happiness. love. Then it all occurs to me. I know what's happened.I've been saved.